This is an actual essay written by a new student of mine. She`s 24 years old and has graduated from Beijing University with a degree in communications. She is officially fluent in three languages, Chinese, Japanese and English...

                   Why The Bedroom is the Most Important Room in the House 

     No matter how big a house is or how many rooms a house has, a house is a place which offers people to rest. The most important room in a house should be a bedroom. People have to sleep every day, a bedroom is necessary in a house. A bedroom is not open to guests, people can have own privacy there. A bedroom presents a person, people can create their kingdom in the amazing space.

     After working a whole day, people need to take a rest and have a sweet dream in a bedroom. Tired people are eager to lay on a soft big bed, a bedroom satisfies the demand. When people think of a house, they think of relief, and they think of a bedroom. A bedroom is a necessary place for people to sleep in a house.

     When people live with family, they share everything. They share food, TV  programs, toilets, however, they need privacy. People are convergent animals, but still are independent. They need a private room. People can have privacy in the bedroom, they can be naked in front of the mirror the check their mucle in the bedroom. They can cry and burn the letters written by ex-boyfriend in their bedroom. People can hide things or emotions in the private space - bedroom. 

      Little girls and boys would imagine they have a castle or a kingdom, even adults would. They can build a castle or a kingdom in the bedroom, and they are the princesses and the kings. A bedroom can be an imaginary place to fill up people`s dreams. In the illusional world, people can decorate the bedroom with their favorite color and painting to creat a sureal world. A bedroom is a merryground.

     There should be a bedroom in a house, like people should sleep. Regardless of size of a house, a bedroom is necessary. People need a place to take a rest, to cry under privacy, to imagine in their own world. A bedroom plays many characters to suit everyone`s need. It contains tears, laughs, tiredness, creat, imaginations, and so on. A bedroom is the most important and necessary room in a house.

                                                                                                                       Vanessa Lin

*All punctuation and spelling errors are the author`s.

I`m trying to get this girl through the TOEFL exam in September. Wish me luck!